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The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from 1949-2008. Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer identifying the main trends and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from 1949-2008. Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer identifying the main trends and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the consumption of four different sources of renewable energy in the US from 1949 to 2008, measured in
Quadrillion
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BTU
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It is clear that
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 the total consumption of renewable energy increased significantly over the period, with Hydroelectric
Power
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 being the most popular source.
However
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, there were
also
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 some variations and contrasts in the trends of each source. In 1950, Hydroelectric
Power
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 and Wood accounted for nearly 2
Quadrillion
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BTU
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 each,
while
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 Biofuel and Wind were negligible. Over the next two decades, Hydroelectric
Power
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 increased slightly to about 3
Quadrillion
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,
while
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 Wood remained stable. From 1970 to 2000, Hydroelectric
Power
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 fluctuated between 3 and 4, before dropping to just over 2 in 2008. Wood,
on the other hand
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, rose gradually to about 3 in 1989, and
then
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 fell steadily to around 2 by the end of the period.
In contrast
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, Biofuel and Wind only started to be consumed from 1980 onwards, with very low amounts. Between 1980 and 2000, both sources grew slowly to less than 0.5
Quadrillion
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BTU
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However
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, after 2000, Biofuel surged dramatically to almost 2 in 2008,
while
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 Wind peaked at less than 0.5 in the same year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion, btu, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trend
  • renewable energy
  • stagnant level
  • increase in consumption
  • energy policy
  • technological advancements
  • fluctuations
  • public and governmental support
  • cleaner energy sources
  • economic factors
  • policy changes
  • peak consumption
  • significant improvement
  • shift
  • dips or slowdowns
  • economic recessions
  • governmental policy
  • investments
  • timeline
  • comparative analysis
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