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Some people think schools should group pupils according to their academic capabilities, but other believes pupils with different abilities should be educated together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #schools #group #pupils #capabilities #abilities
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Mixing
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student
students
 with different learning abilities is the new trend,
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 many schools have
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. Yet specialized
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courses
 focusing on pupils with limited abilities
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 still favourable
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 many parents. In
this
 article am going to discuss both views. On one hand, many caregivers prefer specialized
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institutions
 for their children with learning difficulties. They think that they accept
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 number in each class, providing
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a focus
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 on their needs and extra attention.
Also
 from a
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psychological
 point of view, those classes are usually less stressful, as grasping knowledge and comprehension is very comparable among them.
On the other hand
,
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 studies have
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supported
 the idea of mixing
students
 with learning disabilities with other ordinary
students
, owing to the tremendous
benifits
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benefits
. There
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 a huge improvement when those less gifted
pupils
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pupils'
pupil's
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 results were measured. As
childern
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children
 usually learn by model, those
students
 copied their
colleugues
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colleagues
, which improved their social skills and boomed their learning curve.
Suprizingly
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Surprisingly
 the studies showed an added value to the regular
students
 as well, they learnt how to become more
compasionate
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compassionate
, caring and much accepting when mixed with those who are less
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privileged
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 totally support preventing segregation of
students
according to
 their abilities. The
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benefits
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 the disadvantages in both groups, owing to faster learning and added skills
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needed
ones
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, yet the moral
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lessons
 to regular pupils are significant. In conclusion,
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separating
operating
 student with learning difficulties in specialized setting still exist,
however
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however,
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 the advantages of administering them in regular schools are enormous to both
students
 and society.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly states both sides of the argument and includes a thesis statement that reflects your opinion.
Task Achievement
Expand on your main points by providing more specific examples and evidence to substantiate your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on developing a clear logical progression of ideas throughout your essay. Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to guide the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a more distinct separation between the discussion of the two views and your opinion to improve clarity.
Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Avoid informal language and utilize a more academic tone and vocabulary.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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