The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph demonstrates
that
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apply
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how much
consuption
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consumption
of energy is recorded since 1980 in the USA between 1980 and 2030.
Overall
, It is obviously seen that consumption of Petrol and Oil, Coal, Natural
Gas
,Nuclear and Solar/Wind
steadly
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steadily
increased,
while
Hydropower
remain
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remained
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more or less the same during the given time.
In addition
, consumption of Petrol and
Gas
and Coal
peak
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peaked
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at their highest points
at the end
of the period. Regarding Petrol and Oil
starts
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started
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with
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at
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35 Quadrillion in 1980 and is erratic during the period until its peak point almost 50 in 2030
comparability
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compared
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with Coal and Natural
gas
.
Similarily
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Similarly
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, Coal and and Natural
Gas
have recorded their maximum rates
30
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of 30
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and 20, respectively, in 2030.
In contrast
, the other energies, namely- Nuclear, Solar/Wind begin,
approximetely
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approximately
, 3
quadrillition
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quadrillion
in 1980 and
rise
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rose
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slowely
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slowly
,
whereas
Hydropower experienced the same rate
with
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as
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Nuclear ad Solar/Wind but
increase
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increased
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at a slow pace.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
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