Q. An increase in production of consumer goods results in damaging the environment. What are the causes of this and give a possible solution?

The raising of mass
production
of consumer
goods
damages the environment. In
this
essaay
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essay
, I will talk about two possible causes of
this
issue and give recommendations
in
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tackling
this
.
Firstly
, the raising
of
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production
means more
carbon
emission
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emissions
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created
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. During the process of
production
, factories
are using
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machines that emit
carbon
to
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into
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the air. The
extention
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extension
of
production
means that machines
are use
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are used
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more often and emit more
carbon
. Excess
carbon
dioxide in the air will create a greenhouse effect that will cause global
temprature
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temperature
temperatures
to rise.
Secondly
, the
extend
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of consumer
goods
production
will
also
create waste problems. In producing their
goods
, factories will create waste that contains harmful chemicals. Excess waste without proper management may result in polluting the water
that
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can be harmful
for
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aquatic life. In order to prevent factories
in
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from
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damaging the environment,
government
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the government
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can create
campaign
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a campaign
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that talks about the danger of
this
so people would buy
goods
based on only what they need and not
over consume
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over-consume
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resource depletion
  • sustainable production
  • biodegradable waste
  • environmental degradation
  • habitat destruction
  • consumption patterns
  • pollution
  • non-essential goods
  • minimalist lifestyle
  • ethical purchasing
  • planned obsolescence
  • throwaway culture
  • recycling programs
  • eco-friendly technologies
  • environmental regulations
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity loss
  • agenda environmental
  • green initiatives
  • corporate responsibility
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