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Online games are becoming more and more popular these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online games?

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games
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 have become one of the world’s
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 pastimes, and gaming prevalence continues to grow every year. There can be positive effects of
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 when played in moderation.
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, there can
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 be negative effects when played excessively.
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 is one of the most notable benefits of gaming because it provides you with the ability to perform your daily
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 better and more efficiently and
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 complete many
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 at the same
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. Many
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 force players to perform several
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 at the same
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, especially action
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, you have to look at the enemy on the screen, keep track of your health, ammo, and other stats,
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 move your character. You might
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 be speaking on the microphone with your teammates and friends. Another benefit of playing
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 is that it might improve your ability to see more details in your eyesight, especially in your peripheral vision.
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 development of your eyes might help you drive better and perform various
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 that include driving. It’s essential to stay within the recommended screen
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 guidelines for all ages since too much screen
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 may cause damage to your eyes.
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, if you play
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 in moderation, you might even be able to see some positive effects on your eyesight. Despite several benefits of playing
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, there are
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 many disadvantages to
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 that might impact the quality of your life. The first and biggest
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 with
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 is that they can make you addicted.
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 game addiction is a rising
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 and is likely to increase in the future. The World Health Organization has recognized gaming disorder as an actual mental health condition, and the global prevalence is around 3-4
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 of
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. Considering that there are about 3 billion
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 globally, the number of addicted
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 is estimated to be between 90 – 100 million. The second
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 with playing
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games
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 too much is that they neglect other key areas of one’s life,
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 as one’s personal or professional life. It’s a safe place to fail, and it presents an easy way to escape real-world problems.
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 escaping from stress is not necessarily bad, the
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 occurs when
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 start to neglect other critical aspects of their real lives.   In conclusion, playing
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 too much might be harmful
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 people, but there are lots of benefits to it.

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Introduction
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Coherence
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Support
Expand on the main points with relevant examples and/or data. This will help to underpin the arguments with concrete evidence, increasing the strength of the claims made.
Task Response
Address both parts of the question equally, providing a balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of online games. Make sure all aspects of the prompt are covered fully.
Conclusion
Conclude the essay with a separate paragraph that summarizes the main points and restates the topic in light of the discussions had. The conclusion should not introduce new ideas.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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