The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The data provides information about the monthly changes in the cost of three

type

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of metals in 2014.

Overall

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copper

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as well as

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nickel

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and

zinc

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fluctuates

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over

the

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all

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period of time and

finally

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got approximately similar rates.

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at the beginning

2014

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of 2014

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nickel

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was the most expensive metal with

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a 6

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percent

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indicator,

whereas

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copper

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and

zinc

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was

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2 and 1, respectively.

Nickel

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showed

dramatically

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decrease between January and June and troughed to -3

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, but after that slightly rose up to -1.

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nickel

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price

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fluctuated in the rest of

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and

finally

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grew to 1

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percent

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in December.

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, the changes in prices of

copper

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and

zinc

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consist

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of more

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stability.

Zinc

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, on its own, peaked

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at 3

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percent

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per cent

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in February and reached a bottom -1 in October, but

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December stopped

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apply

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percent

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per cent

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Although

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copper

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steadily

decline

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declined

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between January and June, its price

reach

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reached

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roughly 1.5 percentage changes in December 2014.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, percent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuates" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

163 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

fluctuate
volatile
stability
peak
trough
increment
decrement
steady
gradual
sharp
increase
decrease
month-on-month
average monthly change
commodity
benchmark
trend
precipitous
plateau
significant
marginal
surge
dip
plummet
soar

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