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Information about the Johns Hopkins University Master of Science in Education International Teaching and Global Leadership Scholarship

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Information about the Johns Hopkins University Master of Science in Education International Teaching and Global Leadership Scholarship Johns Hopkins University offers a scholarship of $25,000/student to candidates who want to pursue a master's degree in the fields/fields of education and future innovation policy planning. Provide amenities and access to exclusive research, mentoring and network resources. Master of Science Degree from a US Global Top#9/Top#10 University. Short training period. Allows applications with diverse majors, does not require GMAT/GRE, TOEFL/IELTS (If you have a bachelor's degree from an English-speaking country). Conditions: GPA 2.8/4.0, English proficiency from TOEFL is 90 or IELTS score is 6.5
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Task response was inadequate. The essay lacks elaboration on how the scholarship advances education and future innovation policy planning. More detail on the scholarship's impact and the profiles of typical recipients would enhance the response.
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Coherence and cohesion need significant improvement. The essay does not flow logically and fails to use cohesive devices effectively. An intro and conclusion are present but weak. Use clear paragraphs and transitional phrases for better structure.

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