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The pie chart below show ubits of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1989 and 2000

The pie chart below show ubits of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1989 and 2000
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The given piechart illustrates the units of
electricity
 generated by the
fuel
 sources over two decades in Australia and France.
The
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electricity
is now become
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now becomes
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 an daily basic need in our
day to day
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day-to-day
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life
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lives
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.The generation is done by many sources of
fuel
. The modern development in
the
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nuclear science has made
an
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a
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 huge impact
in
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on
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 the
production
 of
power
. The
production
 of
the
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electricity
 in Australia is mainly produced by using coal as their main
source
 of
fuel
.In 1980 the
production
 was made by using hydro
power
 and natural gas as their secondary
source
. The oil was the least consumed
fuel
 when compared to others.But in recent days
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coal has
became
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become
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 the main
source
 rather than using
the
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other sources as their
fuel
.
This
 can lead to the extinction of coal if consumed
in
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at
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this
 rate.The
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 can be improved and can be made more
production
 from
this
source
.The
production
 of energy by the
source
the
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of the
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 oil has
complety
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completely
 vanished.
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France is one of the leading
consumer
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consumers
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 of
electricity
 in the world.They use all the fuels in similar amounts which makes them significant and intelligent producer of
electricity
/In 1980 they used
the
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coal and
the
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natural gas for
their
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half of
production
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the production
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 of
electricity
. These caused
an
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a
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 huge amount of pollution.But in recent times
the
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technological advancement in the nuclear field has made them
to
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adapt to nuclear
power
 as their main
source
 of
fuel
 for the development of generation of
electricity
.
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France and Australia
has
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have
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 made more changes in their
production
 of
electricity
.But they must adapt to renewable
fuel
 as their main
source
instead
 of using
other energy
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another energy source
other energy sources
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source
.
This
 has helped many countries to reduce
the
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pollution and preserve fuels for future
generation
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generations
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, fuel, production, power, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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