Some people say that companies who sponsor big games can gain a lot; other people believe that it has disadvantages for them. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,

sports

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are become popular among all ages. So that it can be a great media platform to reach people. Many communities

belives

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believe

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that being a sponsor in a

sports

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event can be

benificial

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beneficial

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other

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others

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opposed

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that it has more drawbacks. In my opinion, it is a great way to reach

peoples

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people's

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door

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doors

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through

sports

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events. In the following essay, I will

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some

lights

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this

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hot potato.

Firstly

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To become

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a sponsor can be

benificial

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beneficial

in many ways

such

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apply

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advertisement. A

sports

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event is a popular platform to connect with

desire

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desired

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customers.

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, through the

fifa

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FIFA

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world

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tournament

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coka-cola

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coca-cola

become

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became

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a famous

well

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apply

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known

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well-known

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brand to every type of

people

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person

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, the company just invests in a single

tournament

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they do not have to go public to public for

introducing

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their product

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apply

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also

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, with it

reach

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them in a good way

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apply

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communication.

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, it

also

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increase

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increases

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the amount of

sells

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sales

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through

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kind of

events

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event

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, the are some drawbacks as well for getting a sponsorship the

company

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top dogs have to invest a huge amount of money.

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, companies need to give special offers for

sell

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sale

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which

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is also calculated

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calculate as a big loss. Forever, it sometimes

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get

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poor

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bad image.

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, if the

tournament

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was not

exiting

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exciting

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the cricket world

cup

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tournament

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Bangladesh well

known

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well-known

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brand Beximco

loss

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lost

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a huge brand image because of the bad performance of

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the Bangladesh

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national team.

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, sometimes top management have

mismanage

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those situation

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that situation

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. In conclusion, Sponsership have some small problems

that

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in that

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the owners have to invest a huge amount of money but

also

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risky in different

froms

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ways

on the opposite there are so many good

thinks

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things

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sells

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sales

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increase dramatically ,and the advantages

are outweighs

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the disadvantages.

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task achievement

Your essay does touch upon the points relevant to the question, but the argument tends to be one-sided and could be elaborated upon further. Try to expand on each point, providing clear and distinct paragraphs for each side of the argument to better address the 'Discuss both sides' requirement of the task.

coherence cohesion

The organization of ideas in your essay shows potential, but it would benefit from better paragraph structure. Ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea with supportive sentences. Use cohesive devices effectively to link ideas and paragraphs, but be wary of overuse or incorrect use.

task achievement

There is a decent attempt at providing examples, but they need to be more specific and credible to effectively support your arguments. Ensure that examples are relevant and directly tied to the points being made. This will increase the persuasiveness of your writing.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

301 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

brand exposure
viewership
prime opportunity
corporate sponsorship
foster
positive association
consumer perception
brand loyalty
financial cost
return on investment
profitable
financial burden
negative association
controversy
doping scandals
lucrative marketing move
upfront costs
potential risks
consumer loyalty
financial resources

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