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The line graph shows the number of customers in four restaurants between 1990 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of customers in four restaurants between 1990 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph provides information about the number of consumers in four restaurants from 1990 to 2015
Overall
,
it is clear that
although
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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 was the most popular restaurant, output dropped and fluctuated
along with
chicken
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Chicken Spot
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spot
. Meanwhile, there were significant rises in the number of consumers in
donut
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doughnut
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bro
 and burger bar. In the final years,
donut
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doughnut
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bro
 became the highest and
chicken
spot
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Spot
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 was the lowest. In 1990,
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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 started with 8,000
of
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apply
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costumers
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customers
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,
then
 in 1995, it dropped to 6,000 and remained fairly stable until 2010. Next was the
chicken
spot
, despite a surge between 1995 and 2000, output grew slightly from 6,000 to 7,000
customers
.
Also
, from 1990 to 1995, the total number of
customers
 in
donut
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doughnut
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bro
 with 2,500 and burger bar with 1,000 stayed relatively unchanged.
By contrast
, after
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the 90’s
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90’s
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’90s
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, there was a significant increase of
customers
 in
donut
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doughnut
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bro
 and became the most popular restaurant with approximately 8,000
customers
.
Whereas
, burger bar output was double the figure of
customers
 which was 3,500 in the final years.
However
, the consumers of
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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 dropped to a low of 5,000,
along with
chicken
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Chicken Spot
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spot
 with
only
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apply
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less than 3,000
customers
 in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, spot, donut, bro, customers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuated
  • steady rise
  • declined gradually
  • significant growth
  • overtook
  • peaked at
  • dipped to
  • remained stable
  • saw a surge in
  • experienced a slump
  • outperformed
  • lagged behind
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