you are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park. Write a letter to the head of the city park department. In your letter, 1. describe the problem with the trash 2. explain why it is a problem 3. Say what you think the city should do

Dear Mr. Kunle, How are you doing, sir? How are the family and work? I am writing to you as the head of the city
park
in Agege to let you know how disturbed I am about the heap of
trash
we have in the local
park
. The Agege
Park
is known for its serene environment and its beautiful attractions, but the heap of
trash
in the
park
has become a big problem for me because I bring my children to
this
park
and they have contracted a disease from it
due to
the smell from it, as described by our family doctor.
Moreover
, the
trash
keeps building up every day, and it has become a major challenge for me,
and
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I am a bit scared for every other child. Thank God the disease can be treated, but please, I would appreciate it if you considered other children when they visited the
park
.
Also
, the heap of
trash
is affecting the road, and it is causing traffic jams in the area.
Furthermore
, I would suggest that the city call PSP, since they are the body involved in refuse at Agege. We can let them know the situation at hand in our area so that they can provide a quick solution in time.
Also
, I would suggest that these people come regularly to the city to come and take the refuse from each home to avoid illegal dumping of refuse by citizens. Thank you for the great work you have been doing so far. I await your feedback. Yours faithfully, Miss Boluwatife Oloruntola
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