IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Part 1 You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe your problems - tell him/her when you think you can start Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
I am writing a letter to inform you about my situation that I cannot join your company in the upcoming week. Since I have received a joining letter from your organization I am elated to join my position.
However
Linking Words
, it is unable to join the Company because I have been admitted to the hospital for a couple of months.
Although
Linking Words
, the probation time has been started the next month and it important to join the department. The major surgery on the right leg had been done and the doctor recommended staying two weeks more on bed rest.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, in the next
session
Add a comma
session,
show examples
 he will check with me how much improvement has been made. He will
also
Linking Words
 advise me when I should walk slowly.
Therefore
Linking Words
, it has been occurring problem for me to join the date. I request you to please consider my plea and extend the time of joining. Could you please give me a chance to join next month?. If you do
this
Linking Words
 for me I will be highly grateful
as well
Linking Words
as
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 I will serve my duty with honesty. I am looking forward to hearing you as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely,

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

greeting and closing
Ensure that your letter has a clear structure with an appropriate opening and closing. Your letter starts directly with the content that should be in the first paragraph, omitting a proper greeting.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your writing should be formal and polite, consistent with the nature of a letter to an employer. Avoid informal language and ensure the use of formal expressions.
complete response
Your task response is adequate but could be improved by providing more specific details about your situation and how it will impact your start date.
logical structure
Maintain a logical flow throughout your letter. Group related ideas together and check the progression of your points to enhance the coherence of your writing.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should present a single idea clearly. Try to avoid mixing different topics within the same paragraph to enhance clarity.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: