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The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The picture displays the figures for spending on
books
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 in the given countries during the given period. In Germany,
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the community
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 spent 80
million
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 US
dollars
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 on
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in1995
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in 1995
 and the
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 went up to 90
million
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dollars
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 in 1999.
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this
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 point, it went down to 85
million
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dollars
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. 50
million
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dollars
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 that people spent on
books
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 in 1995 in Italy. The
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 had a slight increase of 5
million
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dollars
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 in 1997, but it went down to 50
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dollars
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 again in 1999.
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, it went up around 60
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dollars
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 in 2005. In France, 55
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dollars
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 that people spent on
books
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 and it had a stable increase of 15
million
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 US
dollars
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 from 1995 to 2001. In 2005, the
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 went up around 75
million
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dollars
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.
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, people spent 50
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dollars
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 in Austria in 1995. following the point, the
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 sharply increased during the given years and it reached 61
million
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 US
dollars
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 in 2005. In brief, Germany had the highest
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 during the given years. Austria had the lowest
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 at the beginning but it increased a lot between 1995 and 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, million, dollars, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • surge
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • comparison
  • significant change
  • spending patterns
  • economic conditions
  • cultural factors
  • cross-country comparison
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