You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The given charts illustrate the
amount
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of
Australian
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individuals were born
while
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who
were
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was
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born in
except
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apply
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Australia
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living in three different types of
area
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areas
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(urban, rural and town) between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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apply
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the people who
born
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were born
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outside in city had
most
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the most
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amount
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in
both
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year
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years
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.
Additionally
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, the
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Australian
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number of Australian
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individual who
born
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were born
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in their own country' numbers were highest in
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the city
a city
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city
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cities
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in
both
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year
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years
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(1995 and 2010).
Firstly
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, in 1995, the
amount
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of borning in
city
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the city
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had almost 50, and
these
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this
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number increased
repeatly
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repeatedly
in 2010. The number of borning in
Australian
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town and outside
Australia
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towns
had
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was
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20 and around 10 respectively in 1995. The
amount
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of borning in towns decreased until
the
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apply
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2010.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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Australian
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citizens who
born
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were born
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in their rural areas had nearly 30 in 1995, and
this
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value sharply diminished in 2010. The
least
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lowest
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value in the given bar chart is the people who
born
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were born
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in
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apply
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outside
Australia
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was
approximatelly
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approximately
5 in 2010. In conclusion,
Australian
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citizens
borning
Verb problem
living
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in cities in
both
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year
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years
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and
both
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area
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areas
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(
Australia
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and outside
Australia
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) had boosted
in
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apply
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during given times.
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