The tables give information about sales of coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries

The tables give information about sales of coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries
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‏The tables illustrate how much coffee and bananas
was
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sold in 1999 and 2004 in five
area
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in ‏Europe. ‏
Overall
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, the UK had the most progress in selling coffee
while
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Switzerland had the highest rate of
sales
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of bananas.
Also
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, the amount of
sales
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of coffee
was
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increased in all five countries but
sales
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of bananas
was risen
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rose
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except in Sweden and Denmark. ‏The UK was the most successful country in selling, from 1.5
million
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in 1999 to 20
million
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in 2004, followed by Switzerland, with 3
million
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in 1999 to 6
million
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in 2004
while
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Belgium was the least successful country, with 1
million
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in 1999 to 1.7
million
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in 2004, followed by Denmark and Sweden by 0.2 both. ‏
According to
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the second table, Switzerland and the UK had the highest amount of
sales
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by
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32 and 4.5
million
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respectively.
By comparison
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,
sales
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of
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in
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Belgium
was
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increased from 0.6
million
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in 1999 to 4
million
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in 2004.
However
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,
sales
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of
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in
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Sweden and Denmark
were
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dropped from 1.8
million
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to 1
million
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and from 2
million
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to 0.9
million
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in 1999 and 2004 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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