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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
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The tables give information about three normal foods in the different communities in four countries.They have three different types the first wheat the second
maize
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 the
last
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 rice.I will talk about what is the highest what is the intermediate and
finally
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, what is the lowest . Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,It is apparent that,There is an increasing
trend
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 in
Cambodi
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Cambodia
 1445 consumption of rice and
a
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an
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 intermediate
trend
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 in Egypt 501 consumption,Following that,The lowest
trend
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 is in Poland 19 consumption .
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, there is a downward
trend
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 in Poland 0 to eat
maize
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this
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 is the lowest. The highest Mexico used or ate
maize
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 was 1083 every
days
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,Still in the intermediate
trend
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 in Egypt 578 every day ate
maize
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.After that,
While
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,We see the tables we can say all the numbers close to each other wheat the first time Egypt the highest 1905 per day,Following that,In the Cambodi 18 every day,
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,In middle Poland 865 per
days
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words maize, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • wheat
  • maize
  • rice
  • countries
  • comparing
  • analyzing
  • trends
  • factors
  • influencing
  • patterns
  • implications
  • health
  • nutrition
  • solutions
  • food security
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