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the tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 european countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant

the tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 european countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
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The tables illustrate how much coffee and
bananas
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 were sold in 1999 and 2004 in five areas in Europe.
Overall
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, coffee
sales
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 increased in all
countries
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while
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sales
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 of
bananas
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 increased in only three
countries
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. In 2004, the UK sold the most amount of coffee but Switzerland had the highest rate of
sales
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 of
bananas
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. The UK had the highest increase from 1.5
million
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 to 20
million
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, followed by Switzerland from 3
million
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 to 6
million
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 in 1999 and 2004
while
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 in other
countries
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 the rate of rise
were
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was
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 less, Denmark and Sweden rose by 0.2 and Belgium increased by 0.7.
According to
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 the second table,
sales
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 of
bananas
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 in Switzerland grew from 15
million
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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 in 2004
while
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sales
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of
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in
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 the UK and Belgium rose less significantly with figures reaching 5.5 and 4 respectively.
On the other hand
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, Sweden and Denmark were the only two
countries
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 that fell to 1 and 0.9
million
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 respectively in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, sales, countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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