the tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 european countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant

the tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 european countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
The tables illustrate how much coffee and
bananas
were sold in 1999 and 2004 in five areas in Europe.
Overall
, coffee
sales
increased in all
countries
while
sales
of
bananas
increased in only three
countries
. In 2004, the UK sold the most amount of coffee but Switzerland had the highest rate of
sales
of
bananas
. The UK had the highest increase from 1.5
million
to 20
million
, followed by Switzerland from 3
million
to 6
million
in 1999 and 2004
while
in other
countries
the rate of rise
were
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was
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less, Denmark and Sweden rose by 0.2 and Belgium increased by 0.7.
According to
the second table,
sales
of
bananas
in Switzerland grew from 15
million
in 1999 to 47
million
in 2004
while
sales
of
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in
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the UK and Belgium rose less significantly with figures reaching 5.5 and 4 respectively.
On the other hand
, Sweden and Denmark were the only two
countries
that fell to 1 and 0.9
million
respectively in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, sales, countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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