The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
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illustrate
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the finish
a
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questionnaire that
request
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visitors to the Parkway Hotel
how
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and how
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they rated the hotel's client service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the period from 2005 to 2010. In general, what stands out is that there
are
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is
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a larger percentage
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of satisfactory
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satisfactory
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in 2005 than in 2010.
By contrast
, in 2010 customers
much
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were much
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higher
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more
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excellent and good than
2005
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in 2005
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.
In particular
, in 2005 hotel’s customers
asked
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were
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considerably satisfactory than excellent, good, poor, and very poor.
Next,
they asked
excellent
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for excellent
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less than a quarter and very poor around %15.
While
visitors
the
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Parkway asked
%
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for %
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5.
Additionally
, poor approximately %21 much
more
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apply
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larger than good, excellent and very poor
is
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are
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much lower than satisfactory.
On the other hand
, after a half-decade in
2010
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2010,
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the hotel’s
client
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clients
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requested
good
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a good
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%39 almost
a
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apply
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forty, in 2010 hotel service
is
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was
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better and more excellent than
2010
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in 2010
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, in 2010 is excellent around %30.
While
poor and very poor dramatically reduce
just
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by just
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under a quarter.
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