The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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three kinds of
nutrients
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sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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in normal
meals
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such
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as breakfast, dinner, lunch and
snacks
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. Units are measured by percentages.
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perspective, the dinner
meals
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has
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more
nutrients
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which
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sodium
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and saturated fats,
in contrast
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, the breakfast has low
nutrients
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in
all
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meals
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. The
piecharts
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,
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the
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dinner
meals
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has
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the highest
nutrients
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which
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just above
two fifths
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of
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and 37% of saturated fat
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added
sugar
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is only 22
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. The lunch
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is
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the
secons
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second
highest
nutrients
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of the three
meals
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which is
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and saturated fat
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the same amount of
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that
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23% and the added
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sugar
is 16%.
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, breakfast has very low
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sodium
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14% and 17% of saturated fat
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10% of added
sugar
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.
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,
snacks
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has
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the minimum amount of
nutrients
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in all three
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but
snacks
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has
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more added
sugar
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nutrients
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which is around half
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having
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low
nutrients
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in
snacks
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, sodium, sugar, meals, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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