Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go on the trip • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Mrs Felycia,
I am writing
this
letter because my kid told me yesterday that the School will be holding a field trip to Singapore
, and he told me that you want to be absent the parent who wants join to Singapore
.
I want to confirm that Change preposition
in Singapore
l
join the field trip. I am overthinking because my kid is too young to travel alone far from me although
he goes with his friends and teachers. Therefore
, you can be booking
a ticket for me and my ticket name is Andrianto Raharja.
If you need information about accommodation, Wrong verb form
book
l
am willing to help you because l
have a friend who works in transportation
sector in Add an article
the transportation
Singapore
. I will ask her about a
price Correct article usage
the
for
our accommodation Change preposition
of
while
we are in Singapore
.
I have some questions for you. First,
what is the purpose of this
trip for my kid? Last
, can l
hang out with my child if there is an empty time in the evening?
I hope this
event is successful, and it has benefit
for children.
Yours faithfully,
AndriantoFix the agreement mistake
benefits
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a single clear idea. The second paragraph is somewhat confused, with two unrelated ideas being presented: your intention to join and an offer to help with accommodations.
coherence cohesion
Use salutations appropriate to the formality of the letter. 'Dear Head Teacher' would be a more suitable opening, and 'Kind regards' or 'Sincerely' are better closings for formal correspondence.
task achievement
Fulfill all task requirements. While you mention a desire to go on the trip, it is essential to explicitly state how you could be of assistance and what kind of role you could play during the trip beyond booking accommodations.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid overly casual phrases and maintain politeness. Phrases like 'l am overthinking' and 'l am willing to help you' can be replaced with 'I am concerned' and 'I would be happy to assist,' respectively.