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The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
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The bar chart illustrates
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number
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a number
the number
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 of foreign
students
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 from five destinations who applied for
Graphic
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a Graphic
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 Design
course
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 in the South of England for the second year.
Overall
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,
students
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 from
Sweden
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enrolled
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who enrolled
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the
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on the
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 two
sctions
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sections
 of the
course
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is
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are
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 greater than other destinations
while
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photography
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the photography
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core
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option
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 is the most preferable section among
females
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 in
Sweden
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.
Syria
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 is the country
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with that
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that
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the
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 lowest
number
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 of
students
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 who applied for the
course
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. With
regrads
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regard
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option
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, the highest
number
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 of
students
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 are males when considering five destinations.
Sweden
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 is the country
who
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that
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 sent
large
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a large
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number
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 of males to the
course
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which
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apply
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about 7.
Moreover
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,
second
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the second
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 highest males from
Spain
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about
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at about
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 6, followed by
France
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4
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at 4
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and
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also
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apply
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the
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apply
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Germany
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 at 3 and
lowest
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the lowest
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number
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 from
Syria
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 at 1. When
its
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it
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 comes to
the
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apply
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female
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females
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, the highest
number
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 of
females
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 who enrolled
to
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on
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 the CAD
core
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option
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from
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is from
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Syria
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 which
at
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is at
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 3,
follwed
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followed
 by
France
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 and
Sweden
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 at 2 respectively.
furthermore
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,
females
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 from
Spain
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 and
Germany
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 were 1.
On the other hand
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 for
photography
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the photography
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core
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option
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, the large
number
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 of candidates are
females
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. in fact,
females
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 from
Germany
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 and
France
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 remained
same
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the same
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 at 7
students
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.
Furthermore
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, women from
Germany
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 at 6 and followed by
Spain
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exactly
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at exactly
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 2. No female
partcipations
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participation
participations
 from
Syria
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 for
this
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 section. It can be seen that male
students
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who
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apply
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do not much prefer about photography
core
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option
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.
However
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, only the highest
number
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 of men for
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 section
from
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was from
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Spain
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 which at exactly 2. Male
students
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 from
France
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Germany
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,
Sweden
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 and
Syria
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 is one student from each nation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, course, sweden, core, option, females, syria, spain, france, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • overseas students
  • enrolled
  • Graphic Design course
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant
  • minor changes
  • enrollment
  • popular
  • diverse nationalities
  • academic year
  • compared to
  • dominate
  • in contrast
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • visual representation
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