Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that consuming
high
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sugary processed
to
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products
leads to health diseases. I completely agree
with
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that to reduce over
consuming
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of sugary
products
must be more expensive. many
people
over consuming
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sugary
products
they
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that
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are cheap.
for
example
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restaurant
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restaurants
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and America serve free
sugar
soda
for
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to
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their customers unlimitedly. I think
this
may
causes
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them for
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for
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drink
sugar
beverage
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without limit.But if
government
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the government
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implement
20
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a 20
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% tax on
the
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apply
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whole beverages must
be
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discourage consumers
to buy
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from buying
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sugar
products
at all, and not waste even a minute to think about them.A regulation like
this
could be extremely effective in terms of preventing
obeysity
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obesity
among
low income
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people
since many of them are heavy consumers of cheap
sugar
-sweetened food and beverages.
In addition
, making sugary
products
more expensive can promote healthier
for
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eating.
This
is because if these prices of
products
increase to a point at which
people
are unable to afford them regularly, they turn to foods
are
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that are
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healthier and more affordable.
For instance
, if a can of a
strawberry flavoured
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beverage price increase more than three times the price of a box of fresh strawberries leads
to
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people
to think about buying fresh strawberry packet
instead
of
sugar
artificial
beverages
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cans.
Although
, fresh fruits
also
contain
sugar
, natural Sugars are much healthier than added ones.
To conclude
,
sugar sweetened
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product
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products
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should be made expensive to reduce
sugar
intake. For one thing,
over consumption
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overconsumption
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of these
products
are
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is
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partly because of their low cost for another increasing their price can encourage
people
to choose healthier foods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar consumption
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • encourage
  • expensive
  • reduce
  • effectively
  • discourage
  • tight budget
  • purchasing
  • disproportionately
  • lower-income individuals
  • healthier food choices
  • demand
  • regardless
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