You have seen a Tourist Board advert welcoming nominations for a 'Best City/Town Award.' Nominate your home city/town. Write a letter to the Tourist Board. In your letter • nominate your town/city and refer to its location • explain what is special about your city/town • say how winning an award would change your city/town
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter because l
saw about best town awarding.
I want to tell you that l
recommend my home town to be one of nominate best
city because it is located in Change the article
the best
Add an article
the center
center
of Indonesia. It is named Change the spelling
centre
Makassar
, and Makassar
has strategic
location, so Add an article
a strategic
l
nominate Makassar
to be best
city.
My reason why Change the article
the best
Makassar
is the best city because
it has clean air. There is Add a missing verb
is because
rule
by Correct article usage
a rule
Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
that vehicle is not allowed in the morning, so people go to work by public transport. It Correct your spelling
government
also
have
Change the verb form
has
delicous
Correct your spelling
delicious
culinary
, and Replace the word
cuisine
l
think that it is the best culinary
in the world. Replace the word
cuisine
Therefore
, Makassar
is the best control of polution
and culinary.
If Correct your spelling
pollution
Makassar
could be winning
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win
this
award, Makassar
would be increasing in tourism
sector. Economic of Add an article
the tourism
Makassar
is also
increasing because local tourist
and foreign Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
tourist
would come to Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
Makassar
, so it is good for Makassar
in each sector.
I hope Makassar
could be one of nominate
, and Correct article usage
the nominate
it
could win Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
award. Thankyou
Yours faithfully,
Andrianto RaharjaCorrect your spelling
Thank you
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Task Response
Regarding task response, ensure that your letter responds to all parts of the prompt fully. You mentioned the location and special qualities of your town, but the explanation could be expanded with more detail and specific examples to strengthen your nomination.
Task Response
Work on developing your ideas more thoroughly. While you have mentioned important points, providing more specific examples and elaborating on them would give your letter additional depth and interest.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make sure that each paragraph contains a central idea and is fully developed. Use linking words effectively to connect your sentences and paragraphs, enhancing the logical flow of your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure, but there is room for improvement in organizing your ideas more coherently. Consider outlining your letter first to ensure each paragraph logically follows from the one before it.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure you include an appropriate opening and closing in your letter. While you have included both, they could be more formal to match the context of writing to the Tourist Board.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite