Take a look at the graphic and complete the task. The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Take a look at the graphic and complete the task. The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The graph shows the
salary
comparison and the average working
hours
per
week
of different professions in the UK from the start and after three years.
Overall
, it can be seen from the graph that all the incomes of employees in different fields
increase
Wrong verb form
have increased
show examples
during the
last
three years. It is noticeable that an underground driver has the highest
salary
at under £50.000 and reaches a peak at over £50.000,
while
a nurse has the lowest
salary
at about £16.000 and increases sharply to around £19.000 three years later. From the table,
it is clear that
a teacher and a firefighter spend the longest time at work. Their average working
hours
per
week
is 55,
while
an underground driver only takes 36
hours
per
week
at work. It can be concluded from both the graph and the table that an underground driver earns the highest income and spends fewer
hours
working per
week
,
while
the
salary
rate of a teacher is in the middle but takes the longest time at work.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, hours, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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