The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first picture shows the constitutions of a fish pie, and the second
one
illustrates the manufacturing process of it. It can be seen from the first picture that a final product is put in a microwaveable container and its food materials include peas, fish and sauce covered by potato slices on the surface. The second picture depicts the full process of the production line started by cleaning
potatoes
and injecting lemon juice into fresh salmon synthetically. Before that, of course, the materials must be delivered to the factory and it describes that delivering potatoe needs up to
one
month and fresh salmon needs 12 hours or less. After finishing cleaning and peeling
potatoes
, the skins need to be thrown into waste disposal, and
then
the
potatoes
will be sliced, bolled, chilled and stored step by step. In the other
manufacture
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line, salmon's skin and bones will be removed after it has completed the lemon juice and salt stage. In the following step, a worker should inspect it.
And
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Then
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then
, the food materials (peas, sauce and
potatoes
) are going to be collected into the container
one
by
one
. In the end, the final production will be wrapped
and
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frozen and prepared to be sold.
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