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The bar chart illustrates the number of people in the UK eating more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish per day.

The bar chart illustrates the number of people in the UK eating more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish per day.
The bar graph explains data about how many percentages of fish and vegetables were consumed by males,females and children a day in Britain from 2011 to 2017.
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,
it is clear that
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 women dominated approximately all the years
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 men reached a significant increase
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the given period.
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, eating these products among youngsters remained the same level over time.
Initially
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, women ate 20% of vegetables and fish in 2011, 2012,
2013
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 years, afterwards , consuming given products grew to 27% in 2014 and 33 % in 2015 .In 2016, the percentage of eating vegetables and fish peaked among females. Its portion was almost 38%. Eventually,
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 rate decreased noticeably to 30% in 2017.
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, the portion of the consumption of them males rose year by year .It was 17, 18, 19 and 22 % in 2011, 2012, 2013, 2014 , and 24% in 2015 .
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, in 2016, the amount of food declined to 23% .
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 rate increased to 28%
at the end
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. The figures for children the share of consuming food was 10 % at the beginning
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 period in 2011.
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, rates fluctuated around 14% and finished at a peak of 15 % by the end of
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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