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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The line graph illustrates information about three various types of resources which took part in
air
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the air
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pollution
 process in the UK over the given
15
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15-year
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year
 time period, between 1990 and 2005. Units are measured in
million
tonnes
.
Overall
, in
the
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terms of
air
pollutants
,
industry
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the industry
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was
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apply
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experienced the highest proportion of
the
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apply
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this
 process
while
 households and transport
were stay
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were stayed
were staying
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 at
the
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apply
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below 2
million
tonnes
 of
air
pollutants
 given the
15
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15-year
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year
 time zone. Both 3 different types of
air
pollution
 resources declined dramatically from 1990 to 2005
year
, respectively. On the one hand, the amount of
pollution
 by industry resources was seen a
sharply
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sharp
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 decrease till
1999
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the 1999
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year
,
approximately
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with approximately
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 3
million
tonnes
 of
pollution
. After 6 years,
this
 figure stayed at 4
million
tonnes
 till 2002,
then
 it
ent
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went
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 down slightly.
On the other hand
, the transport consumption
was
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fluctuated
at
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in
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 the same range ,
such
 as 1.5 and 2
million
tonnes
 of
air
pollutants
 during the whole
year
 period. Turning to
households
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household
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 figures, for the first 9
year
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years
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, the amount of
pollution
 measured in the same stage,
while
 it fell to 0.5
million
tonnes
 of
air
pollutants
, approximately. Following
to
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apply
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this
, the total
air
pollution
 accounted
a
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for a
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sharp decrease in
term
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terms
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 of
million
tonnes
, over 15
year
 period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, year, million, tonnes, pollutants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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