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Band 2

The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given diagram shows the comparison of accommodation buildings between 2010 and now. The given diagram will be summarised in the following essay. In 2010, there was a
garden
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are
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where they
will maintain
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 plants and some trees.
Notably
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 the building was covered by
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garden
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a garden
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area
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by
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 two sides.
Besides
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,
bathroom
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the bathroom
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 there was
an
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 space called
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the livingroom
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livingroom
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living room
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 where students
can
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 discuss generally and
that
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is
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 the one and only chance to speak and engage with all other students. There are 3 student bedrooms in the accommodation building. Nowadays the structure of
accommodation
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the accommodation
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 building was not changed totally but there
was
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 a slight change in the building.
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Additionally
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 they have added the en-suit room near
to
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the entrance and it is attached to
the
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one of the student
bedroom
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.
However
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, there is a huge reduction
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of
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in
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the garden
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garden
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the garden
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area
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 because of the extension of
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the student
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student
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the student
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bedroom
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.
While
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 comparing the two given plan diagrams, there was a huge
area
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 of
garden
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 and
presence
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 of
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a livingroom
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livingroom
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living room
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. In 2010 we can see
omly
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only
 the absence of the
livingroom
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living room
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 and
garden
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area
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. Task 2 Question
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introduction conclusion present
You should provide clear introductory and concluding statements to frame your essay effectively. The introduction should set the context for the information you are going to describe, and the conclusion should summarise the main points without adding new information.
supported main points
Ensure that the main points of the diagrams are well supported with specific details and comparative language where relevant. Focus on clear transitions and precise descriptions when moving from one aspect to another.
complete response
Make certain you fully complete the task by accurately and thoroughly summarising the information presented in the diagrams. This includes a comprehensive comparison of the differences and similarities between the two time periods.
logical structure
Your essay's coherence could be improved by enhancing the logical flow of information. This means structuring your sentences and paragraphs in a way that the progression of ideas is smooth and easy for the reader to follow.
clear comprehensive ideas
It is critical for clarity that your ideas are comprehensive and articulated in a manner that is easy for the reader to understand. Using specific language and clear examples from the diagrams to support your statements will contribute to this clarity.
relevant specific examples
Examples drawn from the diagrams should be specific, relevant, and accurately depicted. They should highlight the main features and differences in a clear manner. Avoid being too general or vague.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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