The graphs below show the opening and closure and the types of magazines that opened in Southern Europe between 1995-2015 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the opening and closure and the types of magazines that opened in Southern Europe between 1995-2015

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The graphs illustrate the opening and
closure
, and the
opened
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types of
magazines
since
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from
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1995 to 2015.
Overall
, the
number
of opened
magazines
hasa
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has
been decreasing, but
closure
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the closure
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number
has increased.
However
, "
Entartainment
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Entertainment
and TV"
has
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have
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become
dominant
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the dominant
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type, and the lowest places have been reached by "
business
" and "
others
".
Firstly
, in 1995,
opening
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the opening
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of
magazines
has
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apply
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reached 250
pcs
, and
closure
has become close to 125
pcs
.
However
, in 2005, the
number
of
closure
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closures
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of
magazines
has been decreasing
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decreased
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from 125 to about 75
pcs
, even
so
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so,
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opening has increased to 400 and decreased
into
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to
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about 375
pcs
. Since 2005, data about opening and
closure
have changed in reverse.
Closure
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The closure
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has increased to about 360 from 75
pcs
and reached
record
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a record
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number
, close to 380
pcs
.
Nevertheless
,
opening
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the opening
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of
magazines
which had had high scores before has
been
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fallen down close to 175
pcs
.
Secondly
, on
pie
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a pie
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chart,
dominant
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the dominant
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type has shown
by
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as
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"
Entartainment
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Entertainment
and TV" which bypassed "music" with 5%, "Hobbies" with 14%, "
Business
" with 29% and "
Others
" with 30 %. The second dominant type had been reached by "Music" with 30%
while
"Hobbies"
has
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achieved 21%. The two types that
placed
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are placed
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on
ranks
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the ranks
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have become "
Business
" and "
Others
". "
Business
" has had 9%, 4% more than "
Others
" which had taken 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words closure, magazines, number, business, others, pcs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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