Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?
Today,
therere
are many faculties and freedom Correct your spelling
there
subjects
in the university so the students
should select to
the course that Change preposition
apply
interested
not only Replace the word
interests
choose
the subject Verb problem
apply
relate
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science
. The following paragraphs will examine the cause of lacking
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the lack of
science
student
and the effect Fix the agreement mistake
students
to
society.
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Science
is one of the most important subjects
in the lesson and many kinds of occupations require candidates with the science
background knowledge. In many countries, there are specific classes for students
who are good at science
and mathematics. In my opinion, these students
do not know what they are interested in and this
class will make them feel outstanding and better than the other classes. When they learn in the university, there are many optional modules that make them know what interested in. This
caused, some students
to lose their inspiration in science
and change majors or faculty to the other. Moreover
, science
is more difficult than art subjects
such
as music and sport.
For the
society, it is undeniable that Correct article usage
apply
innovation
are built and used today because of Fix the agreement mistake
innovations
science
knowledge. Replace the word
scientific
Therefore
, not enough students
choose science
subjects
lead
to the lack of scientist including engineer who needs strong Wrong verb form
leading
science
background knowledge. For some country, this
problem make
them slower to develop than other Change the verb form
makes
due to
the country that
has many Correct pronoun usage
apply
scientist
Change to a plural noun
scientists
can
research and think the new innovation for developing their country.
In conclusion, not enough Correct pronoun usage
who can
science
students
is mainly caused by optional modules and context
of Correct article usage
the context
science
that hard
to learn Add a missing verb
is hard
lead
to many effects on society Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
such
as lack
of scientists and countries Correct article usage
a lack
have a
slow development.Verb problem
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Your essay touches on the topic but does not fully explore the reasons why students avoid science subjects or the full effects on society. Develop your response with more specific reasons, such as cultural perceptions of science subjects, societal values, or employment trends. Include more detailed examples and explore the consequences more thoroughly for higher task achievement.
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