The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives demographic information for employment sectors and gender in Australia
last
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year. There were significantly more
men
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than
women
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in management,
production
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and production
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- over 400,00 in each case and 800,000 more for tradesperson roles. When looking at management roles proportionally, they were three times more likely to be filled by
men
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.
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, the gap was largest in trade occupations with
men
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ten times more likely to be doing
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kind of work. There was a less sizeable difference for labourers and semi-professionals but still considerably more
men
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than
women
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. The only sectors in which there were more
women
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than
men
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were
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those of professionals and clerical, with 50,000 and 100,00 more
women
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in each respectively.
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, when looking at the figures you can see that there were still a high number of
men
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who were employed in these areas.
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, we can see that there are more
men
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than
women
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in nearly every sector and even
those
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in those
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with a female majority the figures were close.
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means that
men
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make up a disproportionate amount of the Australian workforce.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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