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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.
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The provided line graph illustrates the magnitude of funds expended on
books
 in different nations
Germany
, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. The figure shows that the unit
measured
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 in
million
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millions
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 of US
dollars
.
Overall
, It can be clearly seen that the highest budget
of
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payment
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payments
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 on
books
 between 1995 and 2005 was
Germany
.
In addition
, the majority of
rose
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the
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 funds expended on
books
was
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were
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Austria
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in Austria
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.
On the other hand
, Italy was at least paid
on
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for
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books
 between 1995 and 2005.
Morever
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Moreover
,
Germany
 was the majority in expended on
books
 at 80
millions
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million
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 US
dollars
 in 1995. The bulk of
payment
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payments
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 on
books
 in
Germany
 slightly increased
around
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 90
millions
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million
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 US
dollars
 and
then
 slightly decreased to 85
millions
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million
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 US
dollars
 in 2003. There was
dramatically
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 increase
spent
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in spending
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 on
books
 in
Germany
 in 2005.
However
, in 1995, Austria which was the minority spent on
books
 at 30
millons
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million
 and
then
 significantly increased to 70
millions
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million
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 in 2005.
In addition
,
France
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in France
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 and Italy, there was
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a slightly
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slightly
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 rise in
spent
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spending
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 on
books
 around 55
millions
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million
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 and 50
millions
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million
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 to 55 and 65
millions
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million
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 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, germany, dollars, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • expenditure
  • fluctuations
  • economic factors
  • population changes
  • cultural shifts
  • spending patterns
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • projection
  • implications
  • data reliability
  • comparative analysis
  • highest/lowest expenditure
  • investments in literature
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
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