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The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.

The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.
The provided table chart illustrates the percentage of
water
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 utilisation for three various objectives in six nations in the year 2003.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the most of nations used
water
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 for agricultural
purposes
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, except
Canada
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 and Australia.
In contrast
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,
Canada
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 and Australia utilised
water
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 for domestic
objective
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 mostly.
To begin
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 with, the highest percentage of
water
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 utilisation for agricultural objectives was
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 United Kingdom at 90%, followed by China at 87%, India at 82%, and Japan at 66% respectively.
Secondly
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, in terms of the proportion of
water
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 usage for industrial
purposes
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,
Canada
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 had the highest consumption of
water
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 at 32%, followed by Japan at 15% respectively.
However
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, the majority of
water
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 usage for domestic
purposes
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 was in Australia and
Canada
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, each 65% and 63% respectively. In conclusion,
Canada
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 almost used
water
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 for domestic and industrial objectives. Despite that, the United Kingdom, China, India, and Japan consumed
water
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 for agricultural
purposes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • domestic usage
  • industrial usage
  • agricultural usage
  • cubic meters
  • per capita
  • water-intensive industries
  • sustainable water management
  • irrigation practices
  • efficient water use
  • developed vs developing nations
  • water scarcity
  • desalination
  • water footprint
  • resource allocation
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