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Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

#people #girls #husband’s #name #marriage #age #tradition
Hi Nancy, Thanks a lot for your email I hope you
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doung
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doing
 fine. In your
email
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 you asked me several questions about
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paties
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parties
. Honestly, I visit
costume
 parties really seldom, but if I do, I always wear a
costume
 of any popular
musicia
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musician
music
 because I’m a big music fan. Personally, I prefer to make my
costume
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 what I want in shops.
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 I don’t really like
costume
 parties in general. I prefer doing sports and
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. I’d like to know more about
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the musem
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musem
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museum
 which you are going to visit. Where is it? How much is the entrance fee? Is it popular
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 teenagers? I’m sorry Nancy, but I have to go help my mom. Write back soon. With love, Fedor
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task achievement
Ensure that you address the given prompt directly and develop a clear opinion on the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay should have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Remember to include these in your structure.
coherence and cohesion
Support your ideas with specific examples and more detailed explanations to demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Avoid veering off-topic. Stay focused on the task at hand and provide a response that is relevant to the prompt given.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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