Some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world,subject like science and technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, many
people
advocates
that Change the verb form
advocate
History
has been a forgotten school subject
. In addition
, people
state that subjects like Science
and Technology are taking over the masses. I do not agree with both statement
because Change to a plural noun
statements
history
and science
intertwine with one another. In this
essay, I will mention both views regarding the benefits of those subjects and why we need them to further
advanced
Change the verb
advance
the
society as a whole.
On the one hand, Correct article usage
apply
History
as a subject
has an important role on
building Change preposition
in
students
love Change noun form
students'
student's
to
towards their culture. Change preposition
apply
Thus
, will help develop or create a sense of self in their life. This
also
affects their views toward the world on why we need to learn more about the world’s History
. For example
, Indonesia is a multicultural country with many different cultural backgrounds. Hence
, why
we must study more about each other cultures to create a stronger bond between us and the Rephrase
apply
people
to create harmony in diversity.
On the other hand
, Science
and Technology will help benefit everyone through invention and creation in our society. Science
as a whole helps create a more intelligent human resource to be able to compete with the rest of the world. Hence
, why subject
related to science
is also
a mandatory subject
to learn in every academic institution. For example
, many people
in Indonesia still believe in supernatural phenomenon
through education Fix the agreement mistake
phenomena
this
will help them to have a better understanding on
why it is not possible.
In conclusion, we should learn the importance of both Change preposition
of
subject
in creating a better tomorrow for the Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
people
and the world.Submitted by jedidia.husodo on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that the supporting sentences are directly related to it. Avoid discussing multiple ideas within a single paragraph without clear demarcation or logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Make sure that an effective opening and closing paragraph frame the essay. This includes restating the topic, summarizing the main points, and clearly expressing your own opinion, making sure it is consistent throughout the essay.
task achievement
Develop your main points with specific details and examples that are directly relevant to the topic. The examples given should be clearer and more directly linked to the arguments presented.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task. The essay should provide a balanced discussion of both views mentioned and clearly present your own opinion with specific reasons and examples.
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Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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