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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The chart illustrates the
percentage
 of Australian
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in different
age
 categories who did
regular
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a regular
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 physical activity in 2010,
that
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which
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 is measured in
percentage
.
Overall
, the data shows that women in
age
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the age
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category
 25 to 34 until 65 and over have a higher
percentage
 than men in doing regular exercise, except for
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those age
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age
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aged
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category
 15 to 24
male
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males
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 are more active than female.
To begin
 with,
for
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the male
age
category
that is
 the most active is between the
age
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ages
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 of 15 to 24 with over 50%. Australian men
age
 categories 35 to 44 have the lowest
percentage
 standing at below 40%.
In addition
, men and women
that
is
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are
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 in the
age
 group of 65 and over almost have the same
percentage
 approximately 46%.
On the other hand
,
female
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the female
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category
 is quite different because the most active
age
 group is 45 to 54 with over 50%.
Additionally
,
age
 group 35 to 44 and 55 to 64 is around the same level. The least active
age
category
 is women aged between 65 and over.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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