The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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female
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females
age
categories who did regular
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a regular
the regular
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which
percentage
.
Overall
, the data shows that women in age
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the age
category
25 to 34 until 65 and over have a higher percentage
than men in doing regular exercise, except for Correct determiner usage
those age
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15 to 24 male
are more active than female.
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ages
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categories 35 to 44 have the lowest percentage
standing at below 40%. In addition
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group of 65 and over almost have the same percentage
approximately 46%.
On the other hand
, female
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is quite different because the most active age
group is 45 to 54 with over 50%. Additionally
, age
group 35 to 44 and 55 to 64 is around the same level. The least active age
category
is women aged between 65 and over.Submitted by jedidia.husodo on
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