You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line charts illustrate the data concerning the enrolments of international
students
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as well as
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domestic
students
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in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010. In general, the admissions of foreign
students
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had increased more rapidly than local
students
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.
Although
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the number of local commencing
students
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had experienced fluctuation, the total amount remained far exceeding the volume of foreign
students
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during
this
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period. In 2001, nearly 10000 international
students
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enrolled in. With rapid growth, the admissions of overseas
students
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had reached 40000 in 2010 and complete numbers had increased significantly from 20000 to 80000. The figure
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commencing and total
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had trebled over 10 years.
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, in 2001
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Australian universities accepted approximately 175000 domestic
students
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, the amount of which had risen and reached the maximum point
next
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the next
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year.
However
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, followed by the consecutive decrease from 2002 to 2006, the number had reached the lowest point.
Overall
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, local
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` enrollments had increased stably from 40000 in 2010 and peaked at 600000 in 2007.
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While the
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growth
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remained flat from 2007 to 2010, influenced by the stagnated increase of
new
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admitted Australian
students
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolments
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • surpassed
  • dominant
  • fluctuations
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • notable
  • shift
  • influence
  • predict
  • impact
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