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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart describes the way patients are reviewed
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 sides of medical tools. It is compared with three clinics. Clearly, reviews are based on five unequal criteria that will be compared by booking appointments, doctor’s service, care of children, pharmacy and response to concerns. By far the most significant outlay by the feedback from clients in all hospitals was on booking appointments in
Peveril
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Centre
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 nearly 9.1 in comparison to
Longstone
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Centre
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 5.2 and
Marchbank
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Centre
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 7.8. Doctor’s service remained on approximately the same score in
Longstone
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Centre
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 it is 8.0, in
Peveril
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Centre
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Marchbank
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Centre
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. By far the biggest decline was in pharmacy in all clinics 5.1 in
Longstone
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Centre
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, 6.3 in
Peveril
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Centre
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 and 5.8 in
Marchbank
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Centre
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 the lowest review was in
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 of
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 to concerns in
Longstone
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Centre
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 4.3 ,
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 to other hospitals
Peveril
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 9.6 and
Marchbank
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 6.5. In criteria of children’s care held steady at nearly the same score
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 health centres. For instance,
Peveril
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 7.5 and
Marchbank
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 7.3.
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Longstone
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 it was only 6.3. The biggest
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 score is in
Peveril
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Centre
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,
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 the second place is
Marchbank
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Centre
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,
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 one is
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Vocabulary: Replace the words peveril, centre, longstone, marchbank with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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