The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the stages
in
making carbonated drinks. Change preposition
of
Overall
, it's 5-
Add an article
a 5-stage
stage
, man-made, linear process which starts with raw water
and finally
results in the delivery of bottled and canned water
to supermarkets.
First of all, the first stage
is water
cleaning, where raw water
from the warehouse is filtered then
added with Correct word choice
and then
water
softener and chemicals. After that, the
Correct article usage
apply
stage
2 of heating evaporation and carbonation involves water
to be
pumped into electric heaters and Change the verb form
being
runned
through a cooling pipe into a tank, where carbon dioxide is added.
Following that, at the third Correct your spelling
run
stage
, carbonated water
is runned
along a pipe to a mixing tank, where it is mixed with colouring, syrup and flavour. Once Correct your spelling
run
being
filtered again, at Unnecessary verb
apply
stage
four, water
is filled into either bottles or cans and packaged into containers. Finally
, in the last
stage
, the boxes are delivered to supermarkets for selling
.The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.
Summarise the information by selecting and Replace the word
sale
report in
the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Wrong verb form
reporting
Submitted by tieuvuphuonghoa on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
▼
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, stage with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!