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The flow chart below illustrates a procedure of organization's staff hiring.

The flow chart below illustrates a procedure of organization's staff hiring.
The diagram depicts the procedure regarding how a
company
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 decides to hire
their employee
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its employees
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.
Overall
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,
thre
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the
 process is divided
in
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into
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 three main parts: the search for new candidates, the analysis of the applicants and,
finally
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, the
interview
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 and what happens after. First of all, the
company
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 decides
a
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on a
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list of requirements that they need for their future staff.
Then
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, they place the
job
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 offer in the newspaper. Eventually, someone will apply for the
job
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 and once the
company
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 has
recieved
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received
 enough applications they decide whether to
interview
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 the candidates or send them a letter of rejection. Once the
interview
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 has taken place, the
company
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 decides if the applicant is suitable for the
job
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 place. If he or she is not, they will send a letter.
On the other hand
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, if they are considerate
eligeble
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eligible
, meaning that the
interview
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 was
successfull
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successful
, the
company
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 will
procede
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proceed
 with a
job
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 offer.
This
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 is how the
company
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's
recruiment
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recruitment
 process works.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words company, interview, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flow chart
  • hiring process
  • job application
  • resume/CV screening
  • shortlisting
  • candidate
  • interview panel
  • assessment tests
  • reference check
  • background verification
  • job offer
  • negotiation
  • onboarding
  • induction
  • probation
  • performance review
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