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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture demonstrates how patients rated services at three different hospitals. The best clinic
according to
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opinion
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the opinion
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 of people is
Peveril
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Centre
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 with the highest score
in
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apply
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overall
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.
On
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In
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the
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apply
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second place is
Marchbank
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Centre
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 and the worst health
center
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centre
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 is
Longston
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Centre
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. In
Peveril
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Centre
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Centre,
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 the highest point was for
section
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the section
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 “Response to concerns” with 9.6, but in
Longston
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Centre
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 it was the lowest one of all with 4.3 from max grade – 10.
Peveril
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Centre
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 had the best grade for “Booking appointments”,
instead
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 of another two
centers
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centres
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 with 5.2 and 7.8.
However
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,
in
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apply
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Longston
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Centre
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 had one good mark for “Doctor`s service”, others were lower than 6,5. In
Marchbank
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Centre
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 and
Peveril
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Centre
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 the worst
marks
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mark
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 for both was point “Pharmacy” (with 6,3 in
Peveril
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Centre
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 and 5.8 in
Marchbank
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Centre
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).
Also
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,
Marchbank
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Centre
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compete
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competed
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 with
Peveril
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Centre
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 in Doctor`s service with 8,7 against 8,4, but
second
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the second
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 one had
bigger
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a bigger
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 rate. For “Care of children” the worst
from
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of
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 all variants was
Longston
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Centre
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 with 6.3
,
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apply
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when
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while
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Peveril
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Centre
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 and
Marchbank
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Centre
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had
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apply
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scored 7.5 and 7.3.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words peveril, centre, marchbank, longston with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 0 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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