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Which is more appropriate? Renting or buying houses?

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Having a
house
 and a shelter can be known as
one
 of the most essential needs of a person. There are different ways of having a roof above your head based on your financial ability.
One
 of them is simply buying a
house
, and the other way is to live in another person's
house
 as long as you pay them usually monthly, which is referred to as
renting
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. When you buy a
house
, you can make sure that it is your possession and no
one
 can take it from you. You can make any change in the structure of the
house
 as long as it does not bother the
neighborhood
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. You do not have to
be worry
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worry
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 about the rent money
at the end
 of the month and there is no
one
 to tell you to leave for any reason.
Overall
, you can be sure that by buying a
house
, you always own it and if you have
an
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insurance, the cost of
the
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most of the damages to your
house
 can be covered. If you rent a
house
, it either means you do not have enough money to buy it or you are
temporary live
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 in an area (a city or a country). Based on the fact that your residence is not permanent, your leave can be legally much easier than when you own a
house
. You can change your
house
 if you do not like the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 or your
work place
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workplace
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 address changes and you want somewhere near to it. But renting
also
have
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it
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its
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 own cons, like the unstably of your stay. In conclusion, buying a
house
 is usually a better option based on all the certainty and insurance that it brings. But sometimes as mentioned, renting is more suitable.
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