The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and 2017.

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The graphics above depict attendance at emergency care departments of a hospital in Northern Ireland, comparing age groups in the months of December 2016 and 2017. The number of services is shown in attendance per 1000-population.
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, every age
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increased the number of cases from one year to another, in the same month. The elderly
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(people over 75
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old) was the
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which increased more,
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people within 16-44 increased less. Population above 75
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old and children under 5
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old are the two main categories in attendance per 1000-population. The cluster between 5 and 15
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old was the
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that used less
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hospital. The classes aged 16-44, 45-64 and 65-74 are very similar because presented almost the same behaviour in the same period.
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,
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bar chart can be a good tool to help the managers of these emergency care departments reallocate resources for a specific age
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart analysis
  • attendances
  • emergency care departments
  • trend
  • age group
  • patient admissions
  • year-on-year comparison
  • statistical variation
  • healthcare system
  • data interpretation
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • demographics
  • healthcare planning
  • resource management
  • peak times
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