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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
#uk #time #year #summarise #information #features #comparisons #minutes
The table illustrates
the
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how the
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 UK unemployed allocated their
time
 for what they doing
according to
 both gender and different
time
interval
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intervals
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 which
morning
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were morning
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 and
afternoon
 in 1982.
Overall
, whilst the women spend the vast majority of their
time
for
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on
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 housework both morning and
afternoon
, the men used
for
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to
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 job hunting in the morning and
then
 their
afternoon
passed
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watching TV. The major categories which took men's
time
 in the morning
was
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were
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 job hunting, shopping and housework
in
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apply
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turn 22%, 20% and 19%
nonetheless
, they
preffered
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preferred
 to watch TV
with
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apply
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14% and handled to garden with 13% in the
afternoon
. Visiting town, playing
sport
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sports
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 and drinking were not popular
preference
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preferences
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 for men not only in the morning but
also
 in the
afternoon
amongst
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all
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apply
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categories.
On the other hand
, the women allowed their
time
 for housework with
considerable
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a considerable
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 percentage
49
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of 49
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% and 21%. The second popular tendency among the women was shopping with 26% in the morning and following hours,
in addition
 to
this
, they visited their friends and relatives. They generally did not create
time
 for gardening or playing
sport
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sports
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 in the morning.
Moreover
, in the
afternoon
,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of staying
bed
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in bed
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 and playing sport
were
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was
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 0%.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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