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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates
the
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how the
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 UK unemployed allocated their
time
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 for what they doing
according to
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 both gender and different
time
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interval
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intervals
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 which
morning
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were morning
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 and
afternoon
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 in 1982.
Overall
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, whilst the women spend the vast majority of their
time
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for
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on
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 housework both morning and
afternoon
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, the men used
for
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to
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 job hunting in the morning and
then
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 their
afternoon
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passed
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apply
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watching TV. The major categories which took men's
time
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 in the morning
was
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were
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 job hunting, shopping and housework
in
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apply
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turn 22%, 20% and 19%
nonetheless
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, they
preffered
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preferred
 to watch TV
with
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apply
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14% and handled to garden with 13% in the
afternoon
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. Visiting town, playing
sport
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sports
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 and drinking were not popular
preference
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preferences
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 for men not only in the morning but
also
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 in the
afternoon
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amongst
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apply
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all
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apply
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categories.
On the other hand
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, the women allowed their
time
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 for housework with
considerable
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a considerable
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 percentage
49
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of 49
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% and 21%. The second popular tendency among the women was shopping with 26% in the morning and following hours,
in addition
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 to
this
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, they visited their friends and relatives. They generally did not create
time
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 for gardening or playing
sport
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sports
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 in the morning.
Moreover
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, in the
afternoon
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of staying
bed
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in bed
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 and playing sport
were
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was
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 0%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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