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The pie charts below units of electrical production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

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The pie charts illustrate a great deal of changes in units of electricity production' s level via five fuel categories between
France
 and
Australia
 over the period of 20 years from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 coal was a main category in
Australia
.
Meanwhile
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 Nuclear
power
 was the most basic in
France
 . In
Australia
,
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 remained constant as a basic source from 1980 to 2000 but
this
 category accounted for less basic in
France
 Which showed 5% and 2% respectively. In 1980 Units of electricity
of
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from
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 natural gas
was
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were
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a
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fifth in
Australia
while
 it showed
higher
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a higher
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of
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at
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 5% in
France
 around 25%. In
camprision
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comparison
, Natural gas, oil
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and Hydro
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Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
withnessed
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witnessed
 a significant reduction between 1980 and 2000 but there was an
exeption
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exception
exemption
 with coal in
Australia
.
However
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 coal remained constant over the period of 20 years in
France
. There
were
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 a rapid dip
both
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in both
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 Hydro
power
,
natural
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and natural
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 gas from 5%, 25% to just 2% . In 2000 , Nuclear
power
 attained around half of the chart percentage in 180 units
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introduction conclusion present
You've provided an overview, but it is important to have a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your analysis. Make sure your essay has a clear opening statement and a summarizing closing paragraph that reiterates the main findings or implications of the data.
logical structure
There are issues with logical sequencing and the organization of ideas. Paragraphs should have clear and logical progression. Use cohesive devices to create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
supported main points
Main points should be elaborated with supporting details. Include specific data when referencing the charts to strengthen your analysis. In this case, appropriate comparisons and trend descriptions are needed using the data from the charts.
complete response
Ensure that you address all parts of the task. Each feature of the graph should be covered adequately, and ensure that your essay answers the question being asked without omitting details.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on developing comprehensive ideas by expanding your analysis of the data and providing clearer explanations of the trends you describe. Avoid vague descriptions; be as precise as possible.
relevant specific examples
Use specific examples and data from the charts to back up your points. This will make your analysis more robust and credible.

Fully explain your ideas

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