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The prroportion of energy produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010.

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The graph shows how many percentages of
energy
 were produced out of coal by four European countries ,namely
Sweden
 ,Denmark , France and Germany between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there
were
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 considerable downwards in the proportion of
energy
 production
inneach
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in each
 country .
Additionally
, it is
also
 worth mentioning that Denmark made up the largest proportion of
energy
 production over the given period.
Initially
, Denmark was a leading contributor ,which stood at 60% .
However
, the figure had
fell
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 dramatically to 20% by 2004 ,
then
 remained unchanged for the next three years before reducing moderately to 10% in the final year.
Similarly
 , the figure for
the
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Germany ranked
the
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 second position
decresed
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decreased
ceaselessly from around 55% to 5% during a 12-
year
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years
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, but improved again to well below 20% till the end of the period. Turning to the remaining
energy producing
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 nations ,
Sweden
 and France saw relatively slight decreases compared to their leading counterparts .Both
Sweden
 and France underwent similar patterns and
Sweden
 started to
decrese
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decrease
 moderately from about 35% to approximately 28% throughout the whole period.The latter first stood at 30%
experienced
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and experienced
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 a margin downward to roughly 25% in the
last
 year.
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