The diagram describes the production of canned fruit.

The diagram describes the production of canned fruit.
The illustrations present an overview of the key
stage
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stages
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involved in the manufacturing of canned fruit from four main steps
called
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collecting, processing, packaging and delivering. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is evident that there are fourteen steps in the production of canned fruit, starting with the picking of the trees and culminating with buying in the supermarket. The whole
process
of canned fruit starts when the tree has been picked to transport to the factory.
After
this
particular
stage
has finished , the ingredient has been chosen before being
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and washed to cool storage. Once
this
particular
stage
in the manufacturing
process
has been finished, it is
then
followed by being peeled and divided, a
process
which results in water
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juice or syrup . It is at
this
particular point that the ingredient has been sealed.
After
this
material has been finished, it has been cooked and sterilized, it is
then
followed by being cooled.
Subsequently
, a penultimate
stage
which is packed is carried out. It
then
leads to the final
stage
of the
process
where the ingredient has been bought in the supermarket to customers.
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