Shopping is the favourite free time activity for many young people today. Why do you think this has happened? Should young people be encouraged to do different activities in their free time rather than shopping?

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development, young
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fashion and how to
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shopping rather than doing other
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benefits
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activities
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why young
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time
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of communities desire to be more fashionable in
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to
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their friend. Particularly those
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his way of addressing,
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most of his free time
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shopping.
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convenient
for adolescents whine like shopping. Answering the other question it seems to me
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individuals in their middle and
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ages should do other crucial
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,
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there
are some other important and positive
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traveling
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and visiting friends. As a
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of all these
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young
people
have
achose
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chosen
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a great
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more time
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shopping especially
young
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people
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do other
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Venice
activities
rather than shopping.
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