Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is said that students should
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only those
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useful in life, like
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others, including me, believe that university students ought to
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whatever they want and like.
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hand, Studying useful lessons,
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as
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has some benefits.
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, these lessons have better job opportunities in future. As the main part of the world will be controlled by
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things related to
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and
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, studying these kinds of
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will be important.
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,
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that are related to
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could solve many problems that are happening around us.
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the other hand, following our favourite
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in university has many advantages.
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, if pupils
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whatever they like, the possibility of being successful in future will increase.
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, if we
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a lesson that we like, the hardship of
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will become more easy.
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, if we follow our dreams and
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whatever we like, we do not regret
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future. I believe that we live once,
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we should do whatever we want. In conclusion,
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like
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have better job positions and because of
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of
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, they will govern
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, I agree with
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idea that state it is better to
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that we like because we will not regret
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years later and because of interest and passion, we do better.
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task achievement
The essay does not adequately address the full prompt. Both viewpoints and your own opinion are needed with sufficiently developed arguments. Consider unpacking each view with clear examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
The essay suffers from poor logical structuring, with ideas presented somewhat haphazardly. To improve, use clear paragraphs to delineate your introduction, main body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should contain one main idea or argument.
coherence cohesion
To increase coherence and cohesion, ensure to use a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences that clearly signal the main point of each paragraph. The introduction and the conclusion are present but they require more precision and development.
coherence cohesion
Your main points need better development. Support each viewpoint with relevant examples and reasons. This will help make your arguments more persuasive and cogent.
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Specific examples are either lacking or not adequately explored. Use concrete and detailed examples to back up your points. This will help to clearly convey your opinion and show an understanding of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Motivation
  • Well-rounded education
  • Critical thinking
  • Job markets
  • Economic demand
  • Skilled workers
  • Practical application
  • Innovation
  • Societal progress
  • Passion
  • Pragmatism
  • Future job prospects
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