The map below shows a town now and prosoed layout.

#town #layout

The two maps illustrate the current

plan

of Hunderstone

town

and its future

plan

after

developments

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Overall

, There are no significant changes

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the proposed

plan

apart from

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the induistrial

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induistrial

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industrial

centre, roundabout and the new entrance road to the

town

. With regards to the current

plan

, it can be seen an

air field

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airfield

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at the

north west

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northwest

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corner

which

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apply

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is going to be replaced by

Industrial

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an Industrial

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estate. In the proposed

plan

a new path will be included from

industrial

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the industrial

an industrial

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estate to the railway. A new roundabout will be introduced on the railway.

Gas

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The gas

A gas

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station

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stations

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, ring road ,

town

center

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and Build

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arear

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area

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are places that never going to be changed in the future

plan

.A new

two lane

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road which will be be built to enter into the Hunderstone

town

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